I believe that when you are writing you need to know when you are done, and you need to know when to listen to criticism. I am not an expert on either of those things, but I am going to show you three examples of my cartoons where I believe things ran amuck. Three examples where, for a variety of reasons, I got it wrong.
This first example was from 1/9/05. This is the first Sunday strip after the birth of the twins.
I like this strip and I can see nothing wrong with it, but my editor wouldn’t let it run as is. (Actually, if I remember correctly, my usual editor was on vacation at the time, but let’s just say that the decision was out of my hands). First of all, Eve’s groaning in the fifth panel while she was nursing was deemed too graphic (even though she is quite deliberately all covered up), and the punchline was too harsh. Who in their right minds would chloroform an infant? Well, that was the point, actually. They don’t own chloroform, they love their child, but they are tired and making sick jokes. But I had to change the punchline in case people didn’t get that. So here is the second version; the version that ran.
I don’t think this version is anywhere near as funny as the first, and it made me sad to not have a real say in this. This is an example where I think the editing process kind of ruined a cartoon for me. It was better before it started being fiddled with.
This next example is one where I edited it before I even turned it in. I just knew the punch line, as written, was too dirty for print so I changed it before anyone saw it. I think that once again the editing process ruined a cartoon, but this time I did it to myself and I HAD to, because there is really no way it could have run as is. There are standards, you know. Here’s the toon in question.
The original punch line had Manny saying, “What is WRONG with me? Am I growing a vagina?!” And Eve snapping back, “…and here I thought you were just happy to see me.” I have never seen the word vagina on the comics page, and I think that’s probably for the best.
…But I still think it was a pretty funny punch line…
This last example is a cartoon that never ran because it sucks and makes no sense at all. I can see NOW that is sucks but at the time I thought it was funny and I was beyond irritated that my editor didn’t get it and asked that I provide a substitute. Looking at this NOW, I can see that she was absolutely right and I am grateful to her for her wisdom.
If I remember correctly, the point of this cartoon is just that the wet man with the umbrella has irritated the woman and she is making a blasphemous remark when this random dude makes a random observation that I thought was funny and true. None of the people on the elevator know each other (well, except for Eve and her twins), and the HUGE looming plant on the left side serves no purpose except to fill up an otherwise blank wall in the cartoon. WHY I thought this was funny, I’ll never know.
So, what was my point in this blog post? What did I learn? What did all this teach me?
…Hell if I know.





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November 17, 2008 at 3:34 am
Kate
I like your original punchline for cartoon #1, the punchline that ran (versus the one about Manny growing a vagina) for #2 and I don’t “get” #3 at all, so yeah, it’s a good thing that one got scrapped.
The last 2 sentences of this post cracked me up and I laughed out loud. Karen, you’re so freaking funny even when you don’t try!
November 17, 2008 at 8:59 am
Jetaun
I actually didn’t mind your first draft of the nursing cartoon – I thought it was funny – but then again, my husband & I have been known to make the off-color joke or two (we often wonder if the Dr. would perscribe some drug to knock our kids out during the 10 hour drive home to visit family). I like how Manny & Eve say what many parents think (or even say in the privacy of their home), that’s why I enjoy your strip so much.
The second example – I like the edited version, I think it was funnier – you’re right, vagina is not a word ready for the mainstream.
Finally, I think that the randomness of your last example made it funny – I may not have known why the woman said “Jesus,” but the randomness of the response made me chuckle.
November 17, 2008 at 2:09 pm
Ted Seeber
I like the response- Jesus actually had about 8 really good publicists, 6 of which we still have good copies and translations of their writings (actually, thanks to the Nag Hammadai texts, we actually have the other two as well, but aside from autistic Catholics with an obsession for profane heresies, you won’t find many modern Christians reading the Protoevangelion of James).
November 17, 2008 at 6:34 pm
Lyle Gentry
I kept staring at the plant in the third cartoon. I couldn’t figure out for the life of me what it had to do with Jesus. Something about Palm Sunday maybe???
(Obviously, I didn’t get it)
Liked the other two though!
November 18, 2008 at 3:01 am
Colleen Sheehy
I think maybe I’m as crazy as you think you are – I thought all the cartoons are funny and cartoon three cracked me up!
November 18, 2008 at 11:28 am
Libertarian
I liked the 2nd version of #2 best. And I didn’t get #3–I kept trying to figure out what why anyone would know that the old guy leaving the elevator had a good publicist. Thanks for connecting the dots for me Ted–your explanation makes sense!
November 18, 2008 at 3:14 pm
BJMallory
#1 – I liked the ORIGINAL version best. It’s REAL. Nursing newborns HURTS. People need to grow up already.
#2 – I think it’s funnier with the estrogen line – even tho I don’t have a problem at all with the vagina line. I agree with Jetaun – “vagina” isn’t a word people are ready to see in a cartoon. I was in our local theater’s production of “The Vagina Monologues.” My then-16 year old son attended every one of the showings because he provided the music before and during intermission (he’s a great guitarist!) and he videotaped one of the performances for us. I had no problem – and neither did he – with him watching the show and especially seeing his mother perform two monologues (one of them was the “C-word” one). Yet, one of my friends wouldn’t allow her 17 year old daughter to come see the show. And we had two older ladies during one performance that walked out. I live in a small town in central California so some of the comments we got for doing this show weren’t all good – and I couldn’t hang my show flier in my office breakroom because it contained the dreaded “V” word.
#3 – OK Karen – I must be as twisted as you are because I IMMEDIATELY got this one. And I thought it was funny. But you’re right – it wouldn’t have gone over well to the mainstream.